Sleeping Arrangements: At Gongaga (I am going to shove this off a cliff)

...Honestly, if it wasn't for the fact that the Cloud half is already written and I like the Cloud-half, I think I would scrap this and change my mind about the party at Gongaga (most likely to a party of Cloud/Aerith/someone besides Tifa to fit in a scene of Cloud and Aerith). As it is I'm mostly posting it because I want to say to myself "I DID WRITE IT" even if I skimped on the transition to Cloud's half and move on to another part.

There are bits of this I like, I should make that clear. But overall, I'm just not really happy with it for various reasons, including forgetting parts of plans (and then blanking on how to integrate them with what was already written) and remembering after having written this that the first part of Sleeping Arrangements ends on Tifa wondering if she could "one day" tell Aerith about why she worries about Cloud--this is only the second part. A bit odd there. It just...did not feel natural to write like other parts did. Clunky, likely because it's longer than any other one scene, and yet still hole-y in logic.

...Yeah I'm moving on to another part now. The "how much will the girls tell each other for things to still make sense" bugs me.

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